学生寒假作文点评(1)

学生寒假作文点评(1)

My good friend Iwant to tell you about Liu Huan.She is both my friend and my classmate.She was born in otc.1995.She live in PengShui now.She has around face and big,black eyes.Her nose is short Ilike her black,short,and bright hair.They make her look really pretty and clever.She is silm,short and neat.As good friend,we often play,eat together.She often give me afew words of comfort when Icry.I hope we are best friend forever.点评

开头不错，但Oct.应该大写；live---lives,As good friends(复数)；give---gives,friends总之，如果注意到了动词的`数的变化和名词的数的变化，应该是一篇好的作文。