名师点评高考英语满分作文(2)

学人智库 时间:2018-02-09 我要投稿
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  Dear Mr. Brown,

  I have been back, and write this letter to show my thanks. As the exchange student, you make me feel warm. Welcome to my country ,I’ll show you around in turn.

  However , there exists a problem that I have left my dictionary at your home. I like it very much , for it was a precious gift from my teacher who comes from the U.S. I guess that my book may stay on your shelf in the bedroom .

  Do you mind if you send my dictionary to me? I will pay for the postage and I’ll be very grateful if you show your warmness again.

  I’m eager to receive your reply.

  Yours,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文作为信件,首先其格式是正确的。既然是应用文,那么文章的意图就要明确表示出来,本文在表达作者写作意图的时候,情真意切,用词委婉而合理。文章不但使用了定语从句,还采用了疑问句,让句式变化而不呆板。

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  假定你是李华,亚洲冬季运动会将在你居住的地方举办,现正在招募志愿者,你希望成为其中一员。请按要求用英文给组委会写一封信。内容应包括:1.个人情况:年龄,性别,学历 2.个人条件:英语好,爱好体育,善于交际,乐于助人,熟悉本地情况 3.承诺:提供最佳服务

  注意:词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;生词:申请—apply (v. ), application (n.),志愿者—volunteer

  Dear Sir / Madam:

  I was quite excited when I heard the Asian Winter Games will be held in the city I live. My name is Li Hua. I am an 18-year-old boy student in a senior middle school. And I want to be a volunteer for the games. I like English and sports very much. I like making friends and I am ready to help others. I can be a good interpreter in every sports during the time. Hope the games will be a great success. Hope I will be chosen to be one.

  Yours faithfully,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章写得非常流畅,把握了所有要点,同时以“我”为中心,详细说明了自己对志愿者工作的结合,以此来表达自己的决心。由于用词恰当,这种表现就比较充分,具备一定的说服力。词汇和语句的运用也不错。